Sources for the 3ResProj

So far my research process has been fairly effective for the third and final paper. At first I had some hiccups in my research, as it was hared for me to find credible resources using the regular google search. After reading the blog and checking the slides on using advanced sources with google, I found it much easier to find sources which reinforced my thesis. After further research, I was able to find a few credible sources that either reinforced the notion that inventors must also be business savvy if they intend to create truly innovative technologies, but also that refute this notion in some fashion.

ResProj paper ideas

"What becomes most apparent is that young visionary minds are what lead to the greatest inventions. Youth with dedication and persistence, who understand how to make technology available to mainstream audiences, are at the forefront of modern day inventions such as the Apple Computer and the Telephone."

After reading these quotes from my 2Syn paper what do you think about these topic ideas? Do you understand what I am getting at? Which one sounds best to use for the 3ResProj? Why? 

Integrating Sources

Example  1:
The reinforcing idea behind their inventions is that they were to emulate exactly what the people wanted. More relatable inventions meant more accessibility and therefor a wider audience of consumption. Steve Jobs makes note of this(sp) in his interview stating “Right now, computers make our lives easier. They do work for us in fractions of a second that would take us hours. They increase the quality of life, some of that by simply automating drudgery and some of that by broadening our possibilities. As things progress, they’ll be doing more and more for us” (9-10). Jobs recognized that he was able to capture a huge audience because of the magnitude of his invention.(ic)


Example 2:
Jobs speaks(sp) about the youth that generally surrounds the pool of visionary minds(ic).

“It’s often the same with any new, revolutionary thing. People get stuck as they get older. Our minds are sort of electrochemical computers. Your thoughts construct patterns like scaffolding in your mind. You are really etching chemical patterns. In most cases, people get stuck in those patterns, just like grooves in a record, and they never get out of them. It’s a rare person who etches grooves that are other than a specific way of looking at things, a specific way of questioning things” (Playboy, 15).

 The importance of youth in the industry of invention cannot be understated.






My first example of a quote integrated into my paper reinforces my thesis and helps to demonstrate the statement I made about connecting with a huge audience through business savvy techniques. The second example of integration I used is slightly different because a use a quote that speaks to my point by drawing the reverse of what I am stating. ( I state that youth lead to innovation, and the quote explains how with age comes less creativity).

First paragraph of my 2Syn paper

Over the last century the expansion of intellectual minds has lead to a boom in the technological industry. Creativity has lead to the most flourishing period of technologies for communication, across the world. Whether it be Alexander Graham Bell’s invention of the telephone of Steve Job revolution in the modern day computer, there have been leaps and bounds in the field of technology over the past hundred and fifty years.

After reading this first paragraph what do you think my paper is about?  The paper is about the advancement in technology that has occurred over the last century.

What is a Synthesis?

Synthesis is the incorporation of ideas from various sources into text with as little idiosyncrasies possible. Synthesis is highly important to the writing process because it allows for an established and apparent reinforcement of statements made throughout a text. An effective synthesis allows for helps the audience better understand the authors perspective through complimenting views from other sources. The process of synthesizing is important for every author to grasp and use effectively if they expect to take their writing to the next level. The first step of synthesis is finding the right places to incorporate it. If a quote feels out of place it often makes the writing clunky and if the quote is not quite flowing it adds a choppy feel to the text. Once incorporated into the text it is important that whatever is synthesized is relevant to the larger point of the text. If something is synthesized with no coherent connection to the larger point then there is no relevance in it being utilized in the first place. Finally, the synthesis must not play too heavy a role within the text. If the synthesis outweighs the writer’s words then it is not really a synthesis at all. In relation to the two documents I read synthesis is obviously key. The New York Times article on Graham provides various examples which can easily be synthesized due to its fluid structure. One problem with the article though, is that it often goes for paragraphs without providing any relevant information. Steve Jobs interview with playboy is not quite as easy to synthesize. While the opening few paragraphs provide a rich backstory to jobs his actual interview as not quite as fluid. Still, the interview has numerous occasions where Jobs insight provides for brilliant synthesis.

Steve Jobs

As compared to Babbage’s article on creating the first working computer, Steve Jobs interview provides a much more enlightening and fluent view on the creation of a machine. While Babbage’s article is full of technical information is does not cater to the audience in the same way that Steve Jobs does in his interview with playboy. Jobs’ creates a vivid image of the power of a personal computer without depicting technicalities. The wavelengths in which Steve Jobs thinks are also quite marvelous. This may be due to the idealistic Steve Jobs describes of him and his peers alike, who went to school in the 60’s. Already, something he sees as fleeting only a mere twenty years later. Something else jobs does, in full, is describe the power of the personal computer. Since Jobs is an excellent salesman at heart, and this shines in his interview. Jobs describes the computer as a machine that “ takes these very, very simple-minded instructions‐-”Go fetch a number, add it to this number, put the result there, perceive if it’s greater than this other number”‐ but executes them at a rate of, let’s say, 1,000,000 per second. At 1,000,000 per second, the results appear to be magic. That’s a simple explanation, and the point is that people really don’t have to understand how computers work”. This quote, most definitely, sums it up so that layman can understand the power of the machine without being drowned in technical detail that really makes no sense to an outsider. The most important conclusion I was able to draw from the article was that Steve Jobs was truly a visionary on top of an industry that would eventually change the world forever.

Revision

For the revision of my first report what I need to do most is work on analyzing the source more closely than I did in the original paper. In my first draft a spent about a paragraphs worth of time implementing analysis of the source. Rather than use the source as a window into the era’s view on technology, I instead, used the document as an assistant to describing Alexander Graham Bells creation of the telephone. What I need to do is dedicate more time and space to discussing how the document shows societies view on Alexander Graham Bell’s telephone at the time he made this groundbreaking device. I do not believe I have to cut out much of my original documenting of Graham Bells invention, but rather, must simply add a lengthily analysis on how the document was important at the time it was written and how it reflected people’s views at that time. I will make this revision by spending further time researching the document and the era’s view on technology as a whole, and then dedicating a portion of my paper to this. Another change I should make in my revision is with structuring. In my draft I spent a fair amount of time at the beginning of the essay discussing Alexander Graham Bell’s origins. Instead of putting this in the beginning of the paper, I should supplant it with an immediate analysis of how the document reflects the society’s views on technology. Whether they be reticent or willing, this is where the heart of my paper, and topic, lye so this should be the meatiest and most apparent part of my analysis. The final change I plan to make in my revision is adding a conclusion that articulates the message of my paper in a concise and clear manner.